Poetry - الشعر

[منتظر النايف]

This is for poetry that we read and like or we write at night
for people we like
or for ourselves to feel the world is still bright

أدعوكم للمشاركة بأفضل الأشعار و الأفضل أن تكون كتاباتكم لا مقتبسة
أطلق العنان و أكتب أحلى الأشعار في اللغة الإنجليزية

[برق الربيع فى نجد]

فى هذا الجال اسمحلى ياستاذنا الغالى والله مالى بeزود معرفه

[الغزير]

... One Day

... When I Was Young

... They

...Told Me The Life Is Fun

...But Now

... Yah Naw

... I Want To Say

...They Are Wrong

... Yah The Are Wrong

... The Life Is Strong

...It Is Strong

... Strong

بشر إن شاء الله صح يا دكتور معنى ومبنى..

[فرح العنزي]

بسم الله الرحمن الرحيم

عندي لكن انا واثقه 100% أنه ال grammer فيه اخطاء واخجل من وضعها .

وهو ماهو شعر ، زي الخواطر ، مجرد تنفيس .
بارك الله فيك.

[منتظر النايف]

You must be kidding! This is more than wonderful. This is your own, isn't it? But if you allow me to make a few suggestions so that meter becomes fine:

When I was young,
They told me life is fun.
But now,
Yeh, now,
I want to say they're wrong.
Oh yeh, they are wrong.
Life's strong!
It's strong!
So strong!

Keep up the good work. This is wonderful. You know? Perhaps it is good if we can publish participants' poems in a separate room. We can vote for the best and see what the administration can offer for the winner. Let's see.

اقتباس المشاركة الأصلية بواسطة : الغزير ... One Day ... When I Was Young ... They ...Told Me The Life Is Fun ...But Now ... Yah Naw ... I Want To Say ...They Are Wrong ... Yah The Are Wrong ... The Life Is Strong ...It Is Strong ... Strong بشر إن شاء الله صح يا دكتور معنى ومبنى..

[منتظر النايف]

Go ahead and publish it for us to read. No need to be ashamed of our own work. Besides, we are not native speakers of English. It's OK we make mistakes. Besides, I am sure you have heard of the the following proverb: To err is human.

It is OK that we make mistakes as long as we improve and get better each time we make something new. Besides, sometimes grammar mistakes may be overlooked in poetry - to a certain extent in fact.

I think everything is difficult the first time we do it.

Hey come on. You must see my first work that I produced 16 years ago. My teacher's corrections were more than I wrote myself!

اقتباس المشاركة الأصلية بواسطة : فرح العنزي بسم الله الرحمن الرحيم عندي لكن انا واثقه 100% أنه ال grammer فيه اخطاء واخجل من وضعها . وهو ماهو شعر ، زي الخواطر ، مجرد تنفيس . بارك الله فيك.

[منتظر النايف]

Oh, moon of the beautiful,
You, rose of November,
You are always in mind to remember,
For me you are so fanciful:
You have descended from the skies,
And later, back to heaven you will rise.

[الغزير]

.yes it is my own,but you make it more better than i did,Thanks dr

and so that

اقتباس المشاركة الأصلية بواسطة : منتظر النايف Oh, moon of the beautiful, You, rose of November, You are always in mind to remember, For me you are so fanciful: You have descended from the skies, And later, back to heaven you will rise.

which yuo wrote is really wonderful


.about separate room i agree with you

and if you dont mind see this paragraph plz


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...I have back again

...to my sad room

Oh yeh, I am room agein

whith 4walls locked door

.and my heavy bain

Agein, One more time

, I have to live the dark

.I have to see the bane

But my mind is not coming with me

It stays there

Flying like abird

!?But where

Just around her

And i would that she know

Every thing is change

even my mien

And i well never cry again

Oh, so sorry

Really I am so sorry

,Now i feel that

I am going to cry again

.And again

Because a piece of me is ther

.Not coming with me again

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بشر يا دكتورنا العزيز عساها مقبولة معنى ومبنى. وتذكر أن أنجليزيتي ليست ولا بد .. إذ أننا نفتقد الممارسة ، وأنت تقدم لنا خدمة جليلة بأن نستعيد بعض الذي مضى، فجزاك الله عنا كل خير.

تحياتي.