الموضوع: Poetry - الشعر
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قديم 02-05-2008, 06:01 PM
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You must be kidding! This is more than wonderful. This is your own, isn't it? But if you allow me to make a few suggestions so that meter becomes fine:

When I was young,
They told me life is fun.
But now,
Yeh, now,
I want to say they're wrong.
Oh yeh, they are wrong.
Life's strong!
It's strong!
So strong!

Keep up the good work. This is wonderful. You know? Perhaps it is good if we can publish participants' poems in a separate room. We can vote for the best and see what the administration can offer for the winner. Let's see.


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المشاركة الأصلية بواسطة : الغزير
... One Day

... When I Was Young

... They

...Told Me The Life Is Fun

...But Now

... Yah Naw

... I Want To Say

...They Are Wrong

... Yah The Are Wrong

... The Life Is Strong

...It Is Strong

... Strong

بشر إن شاء الله صح يا دكتور معنى ومبنى..

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